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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 4, 2005 12:46:50 GMT -5
Drat! Nearly fooled you there... Oh well. Continue anyway!  |
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Post by blazeas guest on Dec 4, 2005 13:15:14 GMT -5
i wil lwhen i get bakcto ym dad's becuas emy main sotry is thre ad i cna see it all atonce. by the wya this sotry is now 10 a4 pages long. YEAH.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 4, 2005 14:09:12 GMT -5
*Bursts into applause* Well done Blaze! Continue when you can and want to! |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 9, 2005 14:25:43 GMT -5
The dragon cringed as he saw unfelt anger in his master’s eyes.
His voice in a whimper he plucked up the courage yet only just to say “How have I failed master Ilrian.”
“YOU LET CROYTAK CONTACT MY FOE.” He yelled. His voice echoing through the crystal so loudly the cavern began to shake. Agroith looked at his master timidly and saw flames erupting behind his master’s eyes.
“But master no-one has e…e…..en…enter….entered my c…c…c..cavern.” he whispered faintly.
“TELPATHY I TOLD YOU TO PREVNET IT DRAGON.” Came the voice of Ilrian and stalagmites feel to the floor one almost skinning Agroith. His masters face faded suddenly and then he heard footsteps behind him and there stood a half dragon half human.
“I am Tyraniar dragon knight of Ilrian and I ma to slay you for my master and take your place.” He shouted “I entreat thee to stand down and let your death be quick and painless.” A large roar echoed through the cavern as Agroith unfurled his wings and flew to the top of the cavern. He stared at this new foe and launched a great stream of fire at him that would of burnt any of his minions to dust. As the fire cleared there stood the dragon knight unscathed a flame burning behind his eyes. He flew into the air twin short swords drawn. A string of dragon teeth round his neck.
“I said I’d let you die easily, but now your pain will make you wish I had.” He thundered.
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hehe 10 and half now
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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 9, 2005 17:33:24 GMT -5
More dragon knights!  Wow, that's a lot... Please continue, if you wish it...  |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 10, 2005 5:10:50 GMT -5
yes i iwll continue and he i believe shall be the noly one. the idea jsut came to me i thoguht of using blaze xcoruupted by shadow or scorch corrupted by evil, but i chose tyraniar who was a new idea.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 10, 2005 6:04:06 GMT -5
Well, that's cool! This story is lookin' good...  |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 10, 2005 8:07:26 GMT -5
yep i gonna do a new bit soon jsut need osme inspiration.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 10, 2005 11:53:49 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Dec 11, 2005 4:39:23 GMT -5
hmm yeah i may read fm5's that usually inspires me.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Dec 12, 2005 2:53:37 GMT -5
You do that! Whoops! Posting too much... *Embarrassed cough*  |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 12, 2005 12:15:33 GMT -5
no problem.
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The dragon was frozen with fear and could not move. Suddenly a scream erupted form the dragon as a sword pierced his neck. The dragon knight grinned he had drove it in just enough to hurt the dragon pain fully but not kill.
"You think that's painful just wait failure.” The knight whispered grasping his other sword and piercing the other side of the neck inflicting maximum pain and slowly killing the dragon.
"I'm going to sit here, I’m going to sit and watch you die.” He laughed for he was a cruel and ruthless as his master and he rivaled his cousin Blaze in power and skill. Yet that did not matter for blaze was far away on the planet of Eclipse or so said Tyraniar's spies.
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The mountain loomed above the two travelers and both were puzzled about how to climb it. It was night and too late too climb and they were far too weary anyway. So they ate and got changed hidden behind boulders at opposite ends. Little did Tariq know that a peeping tom was indeed watching him. For Charinoth was perched above he keen eyes able to see him perfectly even in the dark.
Tariq had that strange feeling that he was being watched and a prickly sensation in his spine. He looked around him and saw no-one. He shrugged and continued to get changed. As he walked back to where the two had set up camp he fed the horse Quickbolt some hay and oats. The emerged the beautiful Serena from behind her boulder. They both climbed into their sleeping bags and cuddled together placing a kiss on each other cheeks as they fell asleep.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 21, 2005 15:41:22 GMT -5
As he woke up he saw a shadow above them and saw a beautiful lady. He stared at her face entranced by her raidance. Suddnely he felt serena's hand on his and shook out of the trance. He sttod up and pushed her off. Or tired to yet her strength was immense. She picked him up and threw him into a boulder. Tariq stared as she bent down and picked up Serena. He stared unable to mvoe becuase of shock. As the woman smirked and wings extended from her back he relised what hse was.
"DEMON put her down NOW."he thundered standing up and unsheaitng hsi sowrd which he slept still sheathed to his belt. The dmon jsut laughed a clod cruel laugh and ebgna to glide into the air.
"YOU WILL NOT TAKE HER."he yelled running at her sword poised for striked.
"Foolish mortla your brother Ilrian wnats her and he as future ruler of the world gets whatver he wants."
Tariq froze in hsock . Ilrian was his brother. How coudl that be possible? It coudln't be his borhter had died 4 years ago near the shadow monutains.
"That cannot be my borther is dead." The demon laughed again
"The borther you knew was dead." IWth those word shse took to the air out of hsi reach and glided to the top of Mt CHing and pulled otu the shining sotne. Or shoudl i say tried to as she touched it her hand glowed white and she was launched way from it. HSe scowled and went enrgy drained back to her master at a very slow pace yet fast enough for Tariq not to be able for her to catch her.
Tariq slammed his fist into the floor tears streaming from hsi eyes. Tears of anger and sadness. Yet mingled with them was tears fo confusion. Could what that demon said be true? He did nto knwo why, but in his heart he knew it was the truth, but liek smot people he didn't look deep enough for the answer and isntead looked to find otu by any means necessray and tkae hsi vengence on Ilrian by any means necessary.
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Dec 21, 2005 15:55:58 GMT -5
Hey, wow, very good! ^_^ Ahh...so Ilrian is Tariq's brother, huh? Interesting. I see both of our stories holds much means of revenge. You're getting better at this writing thing, Blaze. It's nice to know you get inspired by my writing. I'm so honored! Just keep it up. I've seen you have picked up on some useful writing techniques. For example, the new paragraphs when someone else is speaking. Remember, only change the paragraph when another person begins to speak again. Just a helpful tip. ^_^ I'll try to come read more often. I just get tangled up in other things unfortunately. ~_~ Like getting a cold!  |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 21, 2005 15:59:29 GMT -5
well i didi mention the borther thing a lot earlier when i first intorduced Ilrian in hsi palce of Raxor. hehe. oh well nwo to cpy this into word. i got tow copies this way and i gonan find a wya to do a thrid and a fourth so it is neve rlost. Just in case, by the wya it wa syou lsoing yourrs that actually made me think of making a second copy so althoguh it wa sbad about you losign so mcu hwork at least it had oen good purpose i guess. Yet thank you for your kind words and what else woudl isnpire me fm5 becuas eyour the best writer. Brian Jacques gives me soem isnpirtiaon and jk rowling to but it is aminly you. So i thank you my teacher.
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