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Post by Deleted on Nov 10, 2005 12:16:57 GMT -5
He stood up and walked over to her.
“You look beautiful Serena,” he whispered into her ear “The most beautiful woman I have ever seen.”
She blushed and placed her arm around her neck and her lips near his ear and whispered
“Hehe and you are the most handsome man I have ever seen.”
Instinct took over and he pulled her close and placed his lips gently on hers. He turned red and so did he and she wrapped her arms round him and they fell to the floor still kissing passionately. She was on top of him and still they kissed for what could have been centuries.
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Nov 10, 2005 18:52:31 GMT -5
Whoa, a naughty scene. XD Yet very romantic. I love it! ^_^ Keep it up, Blaze. Your story is really good!  |
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Post by Haunter 360 on Nov 11, 2005 16:55:00 GMT -5
Ugh... Well, I'll say that it's well-written. And the basic plot is good... Hmm, but somehow, I doubt that love is always all that simple...  Heh, but I'm just picky. Keep at it!  GREAT SCOTTS!!!  H-H-He's... He's only ten years old!!!Check the start if need be, but he's ten. THIS IS JUST PLAIN WEIRD!!! Oh, just ignore me. I'm picky, just plain too picky...  |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 12, 2005 12:58:51 GMT -5
hehe thats the strange reallly hgue tiswt becuas she is about 12-13. hehe and let's jsut say Tariq's hormaones are developing more quickly then most.
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Suddenly they broke apart both blushing and embarrassed deeply inside.
They both smiled and Tariq suggested they break camp and get going. Serena shrugged and agreed and soon they were both on horseback and riding through the Shining pass of the Silver Mountains.
Yet waiting for them a red serpentine dragon ,Agroith, curled around a horde of treasure laying on top a pale green game the sacred gem of earth hissed waiting for it’s prey to arrive. He stared at the game it’s most precious treasure through it he could see hi masters and hear his orders.
“Agroith watch thy captive like a hawk for he is essential to my plan and If he escapes then I shall have to destroy you scale by scale MUHAHAHAHA.” he said ending with a laugh of malevolent evil.
“I hear and I obeyssssss massssssssssster Ilrian weaver of the spell of shadows.” it replied with a long hiss. The dragons demonic black eyes turned towards a large bird cage inside was a man dressed in robes. The dragon slithered over to him.
“I hope you are enjoying your sssssstay” it hissed “because it is going to be a long time till thy escape Croytak.”
The wise master’s eyes did not open he barely breathed he was in deep meditation sending out messages to all of his pupils through telepathy asking them whether they have found the hero yet. All he cared about was passing on his information to the hero and only the hero.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Nov 13, 2005 8:10:47 GMT -5
Cool... Please continue! |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 13, 2005 8:19:04 GMT -5
the dark being cracked his knuckles staring itnot the barrnne depths of his crystal ball watching TAriq with never ceasing anger. He wtahced Tariq's kiss earlier and laughed knowing everything was going acocording to plan. He turned ot his servant a ginat ape like creature.
"Groksh go to the forest fo everlasting darkness and wait there guaridng yoour most precious stone and set a watch i will contatc you later" he commanded.
the ape jumpe dinto a portla and vanished. the dakr being laughed maniacally.
"All is going to plan and soon the white caslte will be bathed in shadow."
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Nov 13, 2005 21:24:18 GMT -5
Marvelous work, Blaze. You'vetrulygrown in the arts of writing. I am VERY proud of you, my student. ^_~ Say, would you care for that title now? Hmm? I think you've earned it. ^_^ If you want it now, tell what it should say and I'll put it up for you. Afterall, you're working hard on this. And, I don't find it strange hat these two characters have a crush. It's possible. ^_~ |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2005 11:47:58 GMT -5
hehe nah i guess it's not. hehe well an diea ofr a titile i'll put three ideas and you chose.
1. the weaver of shadow spells
2. knig of thiragea (you will see why)
3. wielder fo the flacon staff (you will aslo see what i mean later)
The shining pass glittering with light bouncing off the slivery surfaces of the mountains. It was a place of perfect peace and serenity. The ultimate haven of Thiragea. If only this was true. They did not know the truth, no-one did. They did not know that this place was almost as dark in its heart as the Shadow Mountains. For Agroith commands all beings that reside in the mountains of Silver from the tiniest rabbit to the fiercest wolf. Yet they did not know this and they rode almost carefree Tariq’s only worry was if he was too late.
“Serena do you want to know why I journey.” he called back.
“Yes please Tariq.” she replied her voice full of curiosity. Tariq explained what he had been told by Sephyr a mere two days ago though to him it felt like weeks. Tariq thought gloomily that this would put her off staying with him.
“If you want to go home Serena please say.” He stated concerned but gloomy.
She shook her head and replied “Why would I leave my handsome champion Tariq of Zarnor.”
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Nov 14, 2005 13:31:26 GMT -5
Hmmm, the "Knight of Thiragea" sounds good to me. ^_^ I'll put that up for you. To see your title, look below your rank, ok? It'll be there. ^_~ And I still like your story. Your last post tells me you're getting ready for the next part. Keep it up. |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2005 14:11:13 GMT -5
yeha the first true test of Tariq's courage and sttregth is coming up. and i ma going to revela a secret in tow partys eh will have to test his will power and his power of good.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 14, 2005 15:45:01 GMT -5
tnaks for the title.
Tariq blushed and smiled and kicked the side of the horse gently to increase the speed. the horse rose once agian on it's hind legs and then galloped forward with tremendous speed. Tariq nodded happily as eh saw a cave ahea dof them a cvae he knew was the Caverns of Croytak. Soon they would be there and soon his first true test would begin.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Nov 15, 2005 2:13:11 GMT -5
Intriuging...  And I never said it was strange for people to fancy each other. It isn't! I've had things like that in a couple of my stories... It's just I thought it a little strange that they kiss that... Err, passionately, when he's only ten... Oh just ignore me. I'm too serious. < See? That's my normal face... Joking. |
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Nov 15, 2005 11:16:52 GMT -5
Lol. ^_^ I've had things like that in my stories too. Your welcome, Blaze. I think that title suites you. Hmmm...a cavern. How interesting! ^_^ |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2005 11:54:46 GMT -5
hehe yeah and beleive me hsi first test begins. remmber earlier soemone ilrian sne tlive sin htis cavern hehe.
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They rode forward and stopped otuside the cave. Tariq jumped off and then helpe dhte fiar serena off the horse. ATriq stepped into the cave but someone grabbed hi sarm. He turned and saw serena clenching hsi arm.
"Tariq i'm scared."she whispered. Tariq turned to her nad held her hand he stare dinto ehr pale (i think i siad tey were blue) blue eyes. He smiled and pulled her clsoe and gently placed a ksisi on her cheekk beofre turning ot enter the cave.
"I must do this Serena. If you wnat to wait here. I will return as soon as possilbe." he stated before drawing his sword and placing hsi hemet and sheild on. He then glared at the open motuh of the cave he wa snto afraid of it. He was terrified but he had to do it. He walked in slowly and stelathily his grey armour changed to black as he went in. He grinned.
"i love this chameleon armou.r"he whispered as he walked forward hsi eeyys open thoguh he could not see much at all.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2005 14:02:06 GMT -5
Yet he could hear and he heard soft steps even when he was still he heard them. He wished he could see, but at least he could ask. He spun round his eyes slightly adjusted and saw a pale glowing figure though he could not tell who it was.
"Whoever goes there state thy name and business." He shouted into the darkness.
A sweet voice echoed through the air though by the quiver in it he could tell whoever spoke was scared "T..t..ta..ariq is that y..y..you it's me S..s..se..serena i came to h..h..he..he..help ."
Tariq ran forward and embraced her in a hug and placed a kiss on her cheek. He then saw why she seemed to glow she was holding a torch.
"Beauty and brains what a combination." He complimented. He saw a smile go across her face and a red tinge appear in her cheeks as she blushed. She grabbed him round then neck and embraced him whilst placing her soft pale lips on his. Tariq blushed, but smiled.
When they broke apart five minutes later he suggested they go forward, but that they should hold hands as to not get separated. She agreed willingly and wrapped her hand around his. Her soft gentle skin touching his coarse rough skin. Both were happy but fearful of what would happen next.
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