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Post by CS Revolked on Dec 26, 2010 17:21:28 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Dec 26, 2010 17:26:13 GMT -5
Criticisms with original drawing:
1. Wings not shown. This criticism has been solved.
2. Mouth needed to be longer so it extended further back. This was not really met, but for some reason it now looks better.
3. Flames should connect the joints and the flame should flow through the entire chest. This was met.
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Post by CS Revolked on Dec 26, 2010 17:34:15 GMT -5
Some of the requirements were left otherwise the drawing would have been utterly bad.
Yes, bad is substitute for another word.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 31, 2010 6:00:55 GMT -5
So You said you had done another dragon...a machine one? Let's see it!
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 1, 2011 8:11:13 GMT -5
Not coloured yet.
STATUS: DRAWN - HALF COLOURED
Yeah. I've been so busy!
I will get round to posting it, and I've been pushing back holiday homework to the last few days so I need to do that.
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Jan 1, 2011 13:03:33 GMT -5
A major jump in improvement. ^^ Keep it up! |
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 1, 2011 13:23:05 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Jan 1, 2011 16:05:49 GMT -5
Excellent work amy. My suggestions for improvement if you want to try it again.... You need to work on the head. The mouth should definately be more elongated otherwise it doesn't look right. an example of what I mean: images.elfwood.com/art/p/u/purpura/dragonhead.jpgSee how the snout is longer and the mouth is too. Otherwise it tends to look a bit...bad....the rest is brilliant, colouring great. I would make the wings biggers, but I assume as this is a machine dragon they are more for show then for flight so it is ok for this. |
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 1, 2011 18:04:58 GMT -5
Well, Crystalline created it, and since no dragons exist in Crysala, that means Crystalline has nothing to work off.
Yeah, that's my excuse.
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 2, 2011 13:42:36 GMT -5
Ok guys. I created a new monster. I have loads of ideas floating around in my head, and that's kinda bad. I need to update Chronicles. I have a new horror story, which is a subtle horror. The title is funny. Umm.... Anyway. I have always wanted to make a story about dragons, because, I have loved them ever since like, ever. Beautiful, poweful. I like European dragons the best. Anyway. Here is NAUGHTICOL, THE SEA DRAGON KING OF THE PACIFIC: i284.photobucket.com/albums/ll20/CrystalShadow15/NaughticolSeaDragonKingofthePacific.pngHis name is a corruption of Nautical which I believe is something to do with water. Haven't coloured him. I was wondering whether anybody else did. Just for fun. Me? I would make colouring pages for people but. Meh. Make pictures and people colour them. Lol, what a good idea Amy. He's a pretty cool creation. Also, I made him have a short snout because, Blaze, if he had a long one it really doesn't help for swimming in the water I find. I think. Yeah, my excuse. I will colour him. I just wanted to make one where he wasn;t coloured and one where he was. |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 2, 2011 14:15:54 GMT -5
It looks better on that one, I think you should stick with the mouths being closed.
In order to improve his moving through water I would make his mount more pointed like an arrow. It would cut through the water better.
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 2, 2011 16:55:11 GMT -5
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Post by FlameMaster5 on Jan 2, 2011 17:00:09 GMT -5
Oh much better with the coloring. :3
I like the different shades of blues, that really works out. ^^
And plus, w/o color... He looked like a tree on his head.
My odd perception, don't mind me! XD
But I likes it lots.
Lots.
Lots.
LOTS. ^^
CONTINUE THE ART!
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 2, 2011 17:08:23 GMT -5
Well, you're not the only talented artist on this site FM5!
Hehehe! XD
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Post by CS Revolked on Jan 2, 2011 18:08:25 GMT -5
Been doing a lot of drawing. Behold... Whirring.... Grinding... Churning....
The resonating eye illuminated the seemingly irrepressible darkness. A foot jerked and then piercing the soft silence it slammed against the cold metal floor.
A whimpering sound. A small child. Glowing white sclera.
Another slam and the whimpering hitched...
Another eye came to view and dulled the blood red orb into silence.... it was kind. It was a soft pink.... transfixed on baby blue...
The movements became softer.... less harsh... more welcoming in sound.
Overridden.... the dark would have none of it.
Faded became the pink and reappeared did the crimson.
The whimpering stopped. Completely.
The threatening movements came and any pleas would be drowned out instantly by the chorus...
It looked down on the discovery... one more jerk and the pink came.... it leant over mechanically and petted the head of the girl.
Said girl smiled. "M-Mumma..."
Speak not did it.
Act not did it.
The pink once more faded and its dish like face glistened in whatever light could find it...
The crimson red orb glowed intensely down.... the girl, innocent and tender.... warm and gentle....
Carelessly lay slaughtered on the floor.... limbless.... pools stained its feet.
The claret synonymous with its eye....
No actions.
No speech.
No doubt.
Its head rotated and then its body.
Slowly... emotionlessly.... jerking... it exited.[/b] Not the best ever... but hopefully we know all have an understanding of this.... creature. If it can be called that. Say hello to what I call Duality. i284.photobucket.com/albums/ll20/CrystalShadow15/Duality.png |
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