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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 1, 2007 13:13:03 GMT -5
Well I'll edit it, what appears in America and England, and realistic
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Post by Haunter 360 on Jun 1, 2007 13:20:48 GMT -5
Um... Station Square news? Chao karate international tournaments? I'm not sure what they watch in Sonic's world...  |
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 1, 2007 13:31:53 GMT -5
well I edited it and changed to SSN, and I added a lil comment from Rouge about the top story
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Post by Deleted on Jun 1, 2007 15:51:53 GMT -5
personally i think Rouhge would say something referring t o jewelleryb being damaged before worrying.
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 2, 2007 3:47:36 GMT -5
you think? well I'll change it again, I guess that would be reasonable....WAIT IN SONIC BATTLE SHE COMPARED SHADOW TO JEWELERY AND GAVE HIM A PLACE TO STAY SO SHE CAN'T BE THAT BAD AND SHE CALLED SHADOW A PRINCE. sorry realisation.
So yes next is Chapter 5 what will happen?
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 2, 2007 4:17:14 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 5[/glow]
(ok he's dreaming now..but about what?
Spear was set on a countryside, it was warm, but cool, and the air was fresh. Spear took a deep breath, taking in all the scenery had to offer "Very cool, very cool, I can't believe it, my dreams are wicked, but it hardly feels like dream" Spear's ears drooped, this felt so real and so right. He never wanted it to end "Well hello handsome" a seductive voice said from behind him. Spear blushed at that comment "Uh....hello" he responded, it would have been rude not to answer 'please just go away' he screamed in his head. The voice belonged to a bat, who had now sat down beside him on the lush grass. "My name's Rouge the bat, and may I ask what your name is?" she did a high note when saying her name. "Oh...yes, My name's...Spear" he finally said his name, somehow he was put off by this Rouge. "Do you wanna take a walk?" she asked sweetly almost like she was putting on the 'sweet' aspect of the comment. "Uh sure I've got nothing better to do!" Spear agreed with the offer.
They were walking along the beach quite slowly now, they started on a run but gradually slowed down. Probably tired. A cold air brushed past them which earnt a shiver from Rouge. Spear noticed this and took off his shirt and placed it round Rouge accompanyed with a small kiss on the cheek. The shirt was placed around her shoulders and one button was done up to keep it from slipping off. Rouge noticed the kiss and blushed darkly but kept her head down so Spear couldn't see. Spear put his hand to his heart, it was beating faster than normal, was he infactuated? was he feeling something for this bat? The hand moved to his neck, the crucifix wasn't there. The hand slipped down. To his side. He realised that he had to pay Shadow a little visit, for destroying his only reminder of his grandma.
Spear had already told Rouge that he had to pay someone a visit, so that gave him an excuse to hunt down Shadow. He found himself in Mystic Ruins, and in front of him was a black painted house. The door and window ledges were red though. He was sure this was the hedgehog's house it had to be! Spear walked slowly to the door. The silver hedgehog knocked gently to avoid suspicion that it was him and when the hedgehog came to the door he'd punch him in the face then leave him, simple as that. The door opened and then WHAM! the black and red hedgehog was now lying on the floor with blood coming from his lip and nose. Spear turned around and ran back leaving the hedgehog rendered unconscious.
Spear didn't have his shirt so the wind sifted through his fur, making him shiver slightly. He had to get away, and out of Mystic Ruins. While running, he knocked into a pink hedgehog carrying a basket. This made Spear fall back clutching his nose. "Oh no, what the love of earth, can't you see I'm running!" Spear shouted in agony, this earnt a smash over the head with a hammer, rather a Piko Piko Hammer. "Well you should watch it, hey you look like the guy Shadow keeps going on about!" The pink hedgehog realised. "Hey why don'tcha come back to my house?" The pink one asked "Oh my name's Amy by the way, and your name is..." she paused for an answer
"Spear.." Spear said simply
"Oh I can't wait till Sonic sees you!" the erratic hedgehog squealed
'Hey Sonic I've heard that name before, are all my dreams connected, coz he was in my last dream at the bunny girl's house' Spear thought, he was led off by Amy to her house and hopefuly the blue hedeghog, but were all his dreams connected? if so why? and what to?
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Post by Haunter 360 on Jun 2, 2007 9:46:44 GMT -5
Aww, sweet romance scene there... But, nothing lasts. Unfortunately. Well, write more when you want to! Thiiiiiiis is a cool story.  |
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 2, 2007 10:10:36 GMT -5
Thank you Thank you, keep reviewing, my fav part of that was when he punched Shadow and made him fall unconscious. That was pure lolness. Chapter 6 up tomoz
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Post by Tymki on Jun 3, 2007 9:57:06 GMT -5
I'm confused... Was that a dream post, or not?
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 3, 2007 10:11:39 GMT -5
that was dream post, for all of it and part of the next is a dream post
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Post by Tymki on Jun 3, 2007 12:35:19 GMT -5
How could he feel the cold? You don't in dreams... But he could be dreaming that he could feel the cold.
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 4, 2007 1:00:48 GMT -5
Yes, it's like he's in the dream, he's been sucked inside. Very realistic
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Post by CS Revolked on Jun 6, 2007 14:43:15 GMT -5
Anyway Chapter 6
Spear was being lead through the forest by the pink hedgehog girl, from what Spear could make out she was early-teens 13. They eventually made it to quite a quaint cottage. It had white paint with bits of blue on it, and had a slated roof. The windows were bordered with blue. It had a blue door with a gold plated number on it, the number was 15 (my lucky number ^^) and had a bronze knocker. Amy strolled up with a firm grip still on Spear and was leading him to the door, the curtains were slightly closed so you could see in just barely. Amy knocked violently on the door and rocked her foot back and forth waiting for it to answer. Spear heard locks being undone then the turning off the handle. The hedgehog's eyes peered round, They were illuminated by the darkness in the hallway. Amy responded eager to get inside. "Hey Sonic, can we come in?" Amy asked sweetly
"Ummm...well I guess it'd be ok, then" he tentatively opened the door and allowed Amy and Spear inside. Apparently Sonic had been in an accident with Shadow, so the blue hedgehog swore that he would never even look at the hedgehog again let alone catch a glimpse of him, suddenly a memory of what he did went flashing through the hedgehog's brain. Sonic shuddered. He sat down in the armchair and patted his legs enticing his pet cat to come up on his lap. He started softly stroking him. "It's ok Speedz" Speedz was a big, fluffy Persian, with little blue streaks, though his persona was far from his name, he was the laziest cat you could find. All he did was eat, drink and sleep. Amy bought him for Sonic when it was Valentine's Day as a present. Sonic was attracted to him when he first saw him. Sonic got up when made Speedz get up too. The blue hedgie went into the kitchen. He opened the cupboard and took out Speedz's cat bowl, it was chrome and had Speedz engraved it in. He then took a cat food pouch out. It was the Whiskas brand and he ripped it open and poured it into the bowl.
Spear sat down on the couch, he heard a squeak, he had sat on a squeaky mouse toy, he pulled it out from below him and threw it on the floor, in the corner of the room was Speedz cat basket. Speedz strolled lazily over there, and curled round. Sonic appeared from the kitchenette and placed the bowl in front of the patio door along with a bowl of milk. Speedz got up and swaggered over there, lowered her head and lapped up the milk. Sonic slumped in the armchair and slid down the back. He closed his eyes and fell asleep, he had gone 3 days straight without sleep. Amy caressed his face and then picked him up and took him to his bedroom upstairs. Spear was left downstairs, with the evil-looking cat. The cat walked over to Spear with an evil grin.It raised it's claws and scratched the armchair, it then jumped up and then launched itself to the windowsill, where it ripped the curtains. Amy was heard coming down the stairs from taking Sonic to his room. Spear instantly laid down and pretended he was asleep, that cat would get it. "Oh my gosh Speedz why did you do this?" Speedz gave a simple mewl of regret, Amy picked up the cat and shut him out in the garden.
Spear bolted up and sped up the stairs, he slid into the bathroom. He turned the tap on and splashed water on his face.
Spear woke up and found himself on the same satin bed as before. Except he was over a lot on the edge, and Rouge was under the covers asleep. It was dark out. Spear turned to the clock and saw it was 00:34, it was past midnight. Spear got up and clutched his wound to find it was healed, how long was he asleep? Spear went into the living room and got some water, he drank it rapidly and then wiped his mouth, he saw a red echidna on the sofa. But Spear paid no heed. He slid into the bedroom and slipped himself under the covers and got back to his quite interesting dream.
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Post by Haunter 360 on Jun 6, 2007 16:03:05 GMT -5
BEWARE THE CAT. HE WILL KILL US ALL.  Anyhow, keep writing more whenever you wanna! This story's cool!  |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2007 16:18:26 GMT -5
k so all that was a dream, but how comes rouge is suddenly in the bed with him? Well not suddenly, but i mean surely even though Spear is staying in her room surely she would sleep somewhere else unless of course there is reason for this.
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