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Post by CS Revolked on May 30, 2007 5:15:05 GMT -5
 This is my new story, it'll (hopefully) be tonnes better than my other one. My actual target for each post will be 45,500 words that'll make you busy! ;D This is about Spear the Hedgehog if ya don't know him then look him up in my characters section, and if you can't be bothered then, just have to stay unknowledgeable with him. Anyway let's start, I'll put chapters it'll be easier to understand than one LONG story, and if you are reading this drop a post in BOTH of my stories. ok yes story! I've been boring you so yeah STORY NOTE- APOSTROPHE'S MEAN THOUGHTS OK [glow=red,2,300]Chapter 1[/glow]Spear was sat high in an oak tree, comtemplating what he was gonna do next. 'I could always go and cause some havoc, these people don't deserve half the stuff they get' his fists clenched shut and the word 'people' shot through his mind 'I can't believe it, their own greediness covers their eyes like a blind person', his eyes went half lidded as he thought of his last encounter with GUN. The Guardian Unit of Nations, all they cared about was power and destruction, proving that they were the most powerful, they had numerous attempts to capture Spear in which all had failed. Spear's eyes went fully shut. He laid back against the tree. Nobody could find him here. GUN had given up trying to capture Shadow, there was no point, Shadow was a HERO now. His lust for revenge had swiftly left his body. It felt like it had now penetrated Spear's body and gave him that lust that had finally left the obsidian black hedgehog to rest. Spear stood up and rested his palm flat upon the bark of the tree. A small smirk plastered his muzzle. He jumped down from the highest branch and slowly walked through the green blades of grass, crushing some under his foot. He laughed maniacally, and gained some dark energy in his hand, he short-circuited it when he felt a presence on the other side of the tree. There stood the famous black and blood red hedgehog. He also had a smirk on his face but with more evil lust and desire in it. Spear stepped back, unaware of what this hedgehog was planning. "I'd leave if I were you" The hedgehog named Shadow started "We wouldn't want you to hurt yourself would we" he started some chaos energy in his hand, then shaped it into a chaos spear "CHAOS SPEAR!" He bellowed, Spear jumped narrowly missing the hedgehog's attack, Shadow jumped rebounding off the branches to get higher, Spear attacked the branches with a Spear Spray, tiny little arrows with dark plasma circulating through it homed in on the branches, trying to make the hedgehog lose his step "So you can use plasma attacks eh?" Shadow emerged from the leaves of the old oak which startled Spear, a punch was delivered to to the chest of the silver hedgehog, the silver hedgehog was forced to the ground and the other was hovering thanks to his airshoes "Hahaha, ready to admit your own foolishness!?" the black hedgehog questioned his eyes turning an even bloodier red. "NEVER!" Spear jumped up lunging himself at the hovering hedgehog, "Chaos control" Shadow said simply and cooly, he reappeared on the ground and skated off laughing echoing after him, Spear landed gently to the ground, anger boiling inside of him "ARGH! HOW COULD I LET HIM GET AWAY!" he punched the tree powerfully leaving a fully visible dent. He leaned against the tree tears welling up his eyes, 'how could I let him get away, I shoulda seen that coming miles off' he screamed which penetrated the air miles around. He shook his head to make the tears go away but they didn't. Spear was now walking through the forest dragging his feet behind him "I need food" his stomach growled "I'm so hungry, I could eat anything", the sun was slightly shining through but the leaves made it so the light found it hard to get through, he was nearing a field, not a big one but quite a small one. He breathed a sigh, and then pushed himself on, when he got closer to the clearing field, he saw a house with smoke pumping out of the chimney quickly, it was a cream house with wooden boards along the top from one end of the roof to the other. Spear went into a slow jog, he felt the house was nearer but was pulling away from his grasp "please" he begged hoping this was just a mirage of his mind. He felt suddenly cool brick on his hands, he was at a window and his hands were below the window sill. He peered in and saw a tall bunny with an old-fashioned dress on talking to a younger, smaller looking bunny, with as what he knew were chao, it was a normal blue one but this one had a red bow-tie around it's neck, the small bunny was wearing a neat little vermilion dress with little todler shoes with velcro straps with the socks curled over and a blue ribbon was tied on here ear messily, on the table from what Spear could see was card, paper and glue. They were most likely doing some arts and crafts thing. Spear took himself away from the window and to the yellow painted front door, he knocked on it then pretending, collapsed and made it look like he had passed out. The older rabbit opened the door and gasped at the 'collapsed' hedgehog.
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Post by Haunter 360 on May 30, 2007 5:49:26 GMT -5
*Stares in shock* ... Dude... Have you, by chance, read the previous pages of 'The Chaos Warriors'? It's an RPG, currently closed until I can fix my computer. Or at least, until I'm sure it's working. And FM5 returns from when she's gone elsewhere... But um, I think you'll... Find it... Interesting...  ... Anyhow! Very cool story! Spear seems very cool too! Overall, a very awesome and interesting story, for any Sonic fan! (And feel free to join into 'The Chaos Warriors' when it re-starts - I'll post the basic storyline) (Oh, and nice name) |
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Post by CS Revolked on May 30, 2007 6:29:17 GMT -5
nice name? what do you mean? Spear was orignally one of my fanchars but I gave him a slight makeover, and a persona change. and I made him a RPG character. Thanks you for posting your thoughts! ^^ that was really kind. as I said this tookl me a long time.
(I wrote that well fast, I mean this post)
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Post by CS Revolked on May 30, 2007 12:23:34 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300] Chapter 2[/glow]
Spear found himself lying on a plush couch, his head resting on a cushion which was sagging by the minute. His eyes were fluttering then went fully open, he concluded he had done a good job in pretending he had passed out. His eyes fixated on the ceiling above there were swirling patterns and the colour was a white creamy colour. He turned his head to find the fireplace roaring and radiating heat and moving it around the room. He shivered as the heat hit his body rapidly. The older rabbit came in with a ceramic bowl and a sp-oon, the younger looking bunny held a place mat, and had a genuine smile one a 6 year old would normally give.The younger rabbit came in front of the adult, and laid down the place mat in front of Spear. Spear looked in awe as the bowl of tasty looking liquid was put in front of him. "Oh you're awake, well that's good here's some soup, so you can make your tummy nice and warm" the taller rabbit said in a lady-like manner. The smaller rabbit fell back in the sofa next to Spear and smiled. Spear felt a cute and happy aura come off of her. Spear knew he had made the right choice to choose this house; but he didn't have a choice in the matter anyway. The smaller rabbit finally introduced himself, she lifted herself off the couch and bowed while saying "Hello my name is Cream" she raised her head "and this is my chao Cheese" Cheese started circling round Spear's head, nearly agigtating him but decided to not let it out. "Oh...I might as well introduce myself then" the older rabbit emerged from the door leading to the kitchen "My name is Vanilla and I am Cream's mum" she smiled a warm smile and went back into the kitchen to prepare something else. "May I ask your name please" Cream asked curiously
"Ok my name's Spear" the hedgehog said after blowing the soup before putting it in his mouth.
A few minutes later and Spear was resting again on the couch, his arm was hanging off the couch and his other was over his chest, his legs were lying out. Cream was in her bed having a nap with Cheese. Vanilla was at the dining table sowing Spear's jeans after they were ripped at the knee from Spear's attack.
Spear was dreaming about his past. (the following takes place in Spears dream) Spear looked around all he could see was open countryside. He saw something running towards him in the distance making bursts of chaos power as they run. suddenly a flash of light and it was gone "See you came for another beating hedgehog!" Spear turned around to see the same hedgehog that ran away earlier "You slimy little wimp!" Spear spat, he was obviously angry with this obsidian hedgehog.
"Hahaha, I can say the same thing for you too" Shadow retorted calmly. "ENOUGH GAMES FAKER! LET'S BATTLE!" Shadow got into fighting stance then launched full speed into Spear, which sent him a few feet back, "You might be called the ultimate life form but I'm gonna defeat you!" The silver and orange hedgehog shouted to the ebony and crimson one "I AM NOT CALLED THE ULTIMATE LIFE FORM FOR NO REASON YOU PHONY!" the ultimate life form bellowed loudly. Spear knew that the other would attack so quickly lunged himself, unaware that the hedgehog was planning a major powerful attack. Shadow smirked evilly his smirk full of destruction and hatred, soon he hovering a few feet above the ground, his turned to a reddish colour and then unleashed his attack "CHAOS..." a small pause "BLAST!" the radius of the attack was enough to envelop Spear then a shockwave came passing through, this troubled Spear as he could not stop in time to turn tail and elude the attack, he went straight towards the attack, scrunching his eyes for the pain that was due to come, but didn't, the pain the searing heat from the blast, didn't inflict and burn his body, Spear realised something, Shadow was being held back by a cerulean hedgehog with 6 quills turned downwards, he had jade eyes, and had cool SOAP shoes on, he held back the hedgehog from unleashing the shockwave, "Let go of my you stupid fool!" the hedgehog was barking at the cobalt one "No you get yourself into too many fights Shadow!" the hedgehog kept his grip firm. Spear walked up which earned a lash out from Shadow. It luckily didn't hit Spear "Who are you blue hedgehog" Spear questioned seriously
"My name is Sonic the hedgehog and you're lucky I came in time or you'd have been toast, buddy" Spear didn't need to hang around anymore so cooly walked away without saying a word
He got away finally and was standing on a beach, looking out into the distant waters "So that guy knows Shadow" the silver hedgehog tightened his fist "Shadow...MY ENEMY!" he ran off into the woods never thinking about what had happened and the blue hedgehog, Sonic
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Post by Haunter 360 on May 30, 2007 12:53:14 GMT -5
I meant 'The Darkness Within' was a cool name!  And yeah this story is great! Hmm... Someone with a rivalry against Shadow... Awesomenating! Anyhow, keep writing more when you want! This is an interesting story!  |
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Post by CS Revolked on May 30, 2007 13:40:03 GMT -5
yay I will, I decided I would do that as no-one else was was on so I got bored, and It would be a bit bporing posting on what you need to or you're the last person and you can't postthat annoys me too
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Post by FlameMaster5 on May 30, 2007 14:44:29 GMT -5
Very interesting twist to Sonic-based stories. I've never seen a rivalry with Shadow, before. And since you requested Spear, I know what he looks like. Very cool story thus far. Keep it up, and I'll try to return whenever possible.
You really should join "The Chaos Warriors".
You'd fit in perfectly. ;]
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Post by CS Revolked on May 30, 2007 14:58:48 GMT -5
yay, thank you Fm5 *bows in appreciation* where it says sthingy I tried to change it to spoon and delete the thingy but it wouldn't go away so yeah
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Post by FlameMaster5 on May 30, 2007 15:03:49 GMT -5
Just do this: sp-oon. The forum wants to censor it. You'll see other words do that sometimes, so just use dashes or something to break the censor. Writer's tips from FM5, lol. XD
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Post by CS Revolked on May 31, 2007 3:09:24 GMT -5
yay thank you Fm5 ^^
now is chapter 3, this will be a lot longer than the others coz something happens that will be oh so cool!
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Post by CS Revolked on May 31, 2007 3:52:37 GMT -5
ok
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 3[/glow]
Spear bolted up off the couch and saw his jeans weren't on him, he then heard the front door open and slam shut. "Cream, Vanilla I'm back!" Spear jumped when the door to the living room opened and a blue hedgehog emerged from the hallway. "Ok. Who are you" the cerulean hedgehog asked in a scared tone, he scanned the silver hedgehog quickly "Well I'm Sonic I'm living here temporarily because Eggman decided to destroy my house just for a fight!" Sonic looked down in dissapointment, "everyone else is staying at Tails' workshop" he slumped into the nearest armchair and flicked channels "and you are hedgehog?" he finally asked "Spear the hedgehog" Spear was weary about the hedgehog and displayed it in his voice
"Don't worry Sonic here is as gentle as a kitten" Vanilla came from the dining room carrying Spears jeans "You had a hole in them so I decided to patch them up, may I ask how it happened?" the adult rabbit was curious so Spear let her know
"I got in a fight with someone, they started to attack me so I retaliated back through my anger, then they ran away when they had the chance" Spear took the jeans and slipped them back on. "Thank you but I must leave and find him before he causes more damage, I must and will kill him" Spear stated "Thank you also for your hospitality" Spear nodded and exited the room before exiting the whole house together.
He started walking along the path leading into the woods when Cream the bunny girl came up and gave him something "Here Mr. Spear" she handed him a jewel of a purple colour "It's a Chaos Emerald!, it'll help you teach that person a lesson" with that said she skipped back to her house and the door shut completely.
Spear was quite a way into the woods when it started getting drker but only by a little "Great now I be able to see" Spear muttered to himself, he heard the trees whisper and owls hooting, then a loud bang out-sounded both of them, he saw a tree falling for him so quickly he jumped and the tree landed firmly "Timbers!" a man shouted, Spear dodged again.
'What the heck is wrong with this guy!' Spear thought, he jumped and passed his hand through the air inducing a Spear strike against the man in the contraption, the bloke saw this and put up a forcefield repelling the attack, the attack went straight back into Spear's hand "These trees, why are you chopping them down?" Spear bellowed the question so the guy could hear above the whurring and humming of the machine's engine. It was turned off and the man jumped out and strolled over to Spear "I am making money dear boy, I am selling this wood in the city, it is coming up to winter ya know!" the man pointed out, angry thhat he had stopped his work for this hedgehog "I must get back to work, now run along" the tall burly man hopped in his vehicle and started again. Spear took the man's order and carried on, he had other things to do like find a certain black and red hedgehog. Spear took the purple jewel out of his quills like most hedgehogs and stared at it intently "Will you help me destroy him?" Spear asked the jewel. the Chaos Emerald shined back radiantly as if communicating with the silver and orange hedgehog.
Spear managed to get out of the woods alright, and he was back at the oak tree at where that wimpy hedgehog had ran away. He continued past and then went into a slow run. He continued over several hills and then made it to the outskirts of the city. Westopolis. He was now walking on West road, not many people were walking so he didn't get pushed or jostled about by this stupid bipedal mammals. Most were in cars.
Spear made it to to 'Club Rouge' after taking several dead-ends. He pushed the door open and walked down the silver steps leading to the actual club. When he entered he found hardly no-one in. Wednesday's were always the non-busy days. He pushed himself onto a stool and tapped on the table making a bartender come over "Yes and you would like?" he asked in his cheesy italian accent. "beer, one pint" Spear asked
"Yes, yes right away senior" he said, he fixed Spear up one pint of beer, Spear handed him the money "keep the change mate" he continued through a glug of his beer (most of you would think he's too young to have alcohol BUT the rules in Club Rouge are 14 and over to have alcohol well in this story it is ok) Rouge came through the door and had a glum look on her face "Not many now are there Luigi?" (I couldn't think of an italian name so yeah)
"Ah no" he replied in response to Rouge's question, she noticed the hedgehog sitting there taking the odd gulp of beer. "I'm done now see ya" Spear got off the stool and walked to the door he noticed Rouge and smiled at her, which made Rouge blush.
Back outside Cub Rouge, Spear was walking along Elm street. He noticed a gold aura rush past a crowd of people. It stopped and it was Shadow. He smirked "Ah if it isn't Spear" Shadow started.
"Hey Shadow, you wimp, you ran off last tiome but this time you won't get away!" Spear bared his teeth.
"You wish to fight then SO BE IT" Shadow yelled, making a slight tremor. Spear was shaken a little but got composed again. This was gonna be one hard match-up.
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Post by Haunter 360 on May 31, 2007 6:26:33 GMT -5
Love interest with Rouge eh? Knuckles: Join the line buster! I was here first! Haunter: Yeah! *Haunter gets beaten up for not being a Sonic character* ~_# Anyhow, yep, keep on writing when you want! This is an interesting tale of intrigue and... Drink. (And yes, alcohol is perfectly acceptable!) |
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Post by CS Revolked on May 31, 2007 6:39:30 GMT -5
yes I knew it didn't make sense the alcohol bit I like this story, a lot, now more ppl should read and review fanfictioners saying lol
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Post by Deleted on May 31, 2007 9:29:55 GMT -5
Hey if you ever want any other fan sonic characters made for this then i will be happy to oblige in making one. And it will be a non-hedgehog. Hmmm infact i could go for an an animal that they don't use in Sonic much. A wolf would be kinda cool or perhaps a robot animal.
btw this is a great story.
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Post by Haunter 360 on May 31, 2007 10:24:59 GMT -5
Yeah dude! Don't reveal it! Anyhow, this is a great story. Keep writing more whenever you want! |
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This is my new story, it'll (hopefully) be tonnes better than my other one. My actual target for each post will be 45,500 words that'll make you busy! ;D This is about Spear the Hedgehog if ya don't know him then look him up in my characters section, and if you can't be bothered then, just have to stay unknowledgeable with him.
