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Post by Deleted on Oct 28, 2006 9:51:02 GMT -5
O yea forgot 2 tell you there are 5 acts in each Chapter *woops*
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A Tale of Adventure
Act l The Begining Once in a land named Zenzaris there existed a young boy named "Ray", he had brown hair and brown eyes and loved to train with his mighty blade with his best friend "Jake". They lived in a small village called Danube, it was a small but just right for them little town. Everyday Ray would go see the Master Swordsmen and the Sage to train with J. Ray's sword was very large and required two hands to hold it, but he is still training. Today Ray is going over to Jake's House for a special meeting of their Organization. *Ding Dong* Ray rang the door bell. "Hey Jake whats up?" said Ray, "Nothing much,come on in." "Wow your house is awsome!" said Ray "Thanks."
Act ll The Meeting "Hey I heard you saw a fire lizard right outside the town" said Ray, "Yea I did, it was a big fella to man", "well lets go kill it!" said Ray, "No way our skills arent strong enough remember last week you had to consentrate to summon your "Guardian Strife Blade." replied J. "Alright then lets go see the SwordMaster then!" The Swordsmaster's house was not very far from J's House at all. "Greetings young ones" said the SwordsMaster. "Greetings sir Jake here doesnt think Im skilled enough to kill a Fire Lizard!!" yelled Ray, "Hahahahahaha, my my cant deny an old man for laughing at anything when your old you just laugh at everything, but wait that is why you two are here to train is it not?" "Correct sir" replied Jake, "Quite right lets begin with the sowrd excersise one." said the Swordsmaster "BUT Master!" Ray's mouth fell to the floor. After many hours if training Ray and J were pretty decenst with their blades. Suddenly the Fire Lizard from earlier attacked *Swoosh*,*Bang*,*Whack*! The three of them defeated the lizard with ease and because of their Heroic Efforts they were named "True Heroes". Suddenly there was a knock on the door it was Sage Malkor "Hurry Hurry a "Dark Portal" has just opened in the middle of the town!"
Act 111 The Dark Invasion Jake and Ray ran towards the middle of the town they heard lots of screaming, then they looked up in the sky and there was a swirling portal emiting pure darkness. "What is that!" said Jake, "I dont know." replied Ray. They ran towards the Tower to get a better look at the portal, once there they saw dozens of black dots swarming out of the portal, out of nowhere Sage Malkor came up, "They are Dark Wizards...I feared this day would come..." "What Sage Malkor?" replied Ray "That Portal is a portal of pure evil and shadow, thorugh that portal lies the Realm of Darkness that is where all evil creatures and Dark beings reside. "What did you mean by : I feared this day would come : ?" asked Jake, ".....This is the day..The day that it will all begin, we shall know by morning in the mean time go take shelter these Dark Wizards will kill mindlessly they have no regards for us not amongst the Realm of Darkness. So they went to take shelter in Ray's underground safehouse. "I hope everyone will be okay it sounds like things are pretty bad up there." said Jake "Here if it makes you feel better I will put a seal on the door. The door for a split second shined a bright light and a keyhole of light appeared on the door. "Come on lets go get some rest you can take the west room." said Ray. When they awoke they immediantly yelled "The Town!!", they ran up the stairs to the door "seal dispel, lets go!" said Ray. Once on the surface they starred in amazement and fear as the town was nothing but cindered trees and embers.
Act 1V The Death of a friend As they made their way out of the safehaven theylooked around and saw nothing but fire and embers, then they looked up and it seemed as though the portal was getting bigger, but no Dark beings where swarming out of it. As they were looking arounnd at this unfortunate state they saw a large crater towards the edge of town and a hand sticking straight up out of the crater. "Whats that over there!" screamed Jake, "I dont know lets go check it out." replied Ray they looked down the crater and saw it was the Swords Master. "Master!" said Ray and Jake, "My young warriors the Dark Wizards they came out of nowhere and they threatend the town I had to stop them...he said with his last breath, "Here take these you will need them." the Swordsmaster gave them both a red crystal, "Their called Dragon Hearts of Zynofrom they are gifted with the power of Fire if you are ever in trouble the fire will burst out and protect you, even when you two are seperated they will guide you to each other." said the Swordsmaster, "Thank you sir" replied Jake, "Be brave for the battle is not yet over" he said with his last breath.
Act V A New World
Many wept over the death of the SwordsMaster but Sage Malkor said that "we should move on it probobly wont be the only death that lies in store for us." "How could you say that he just died at the hands of darkness and we were just expected to just sit around!" replied Ray, "Ssshh Shhhh its alright, im going to teleport you both with the remaining strength that I have to a safe realm where darkness has not yet come, 'Yet' he thought. The Sage took out a piece of chalk and drew a circle around them and then some weird marking around the circle, then he started reciting words of somekind but, they weren't just any words it was a powerful spell. "I will be waiting there for you boys if you should need anything!" said the Sage. All of a sudden the marks started glowing a bright blue and everything around them started be blown back as if from wind, then it ended with a bright flash! "Oh I hope their ok where their going....When Ray regained contiousness he felt green grass underneath him and tall tall trees above him, "Oh my gosh that was like awsome huh Jake?" but no one replied, "Jake! Jake!! Where are you?!".
Chapter 2
Act 1 The Forest City
"I have to find Jake" said Ray, he was lost and confused in this large forest,"I've never seen trees that grow this big." Ray tried to remember what Sage Malkor had said before, "O yea!" Ray remembered that Sage Malkor would be 'waiting for us wherever we were' "He'll know where Jake is!" Ray tried to make his way through the forest but there were to many trees and large leaves. Suddenly he came to a sign that read "Kimato Forest", "Now it tells me where im at....." then he noticed a small sign that pointed left and right that read, "Left to Crokea Bog and Right to Kimato Village." "Alright to Kimato Village!" yelled Ray with excitement. Once he arrived he saw another big sign that read "Kimato Village", the air was smothered with great aromas and smells. "Hey, hey, hey who be you?" said the strange little Forest Man. "Who am I?! Who or what are you." replied Ray, "I am a Kimato one of the many people of the forest. He wa a strange little man with a silly green pointed hat, a pipe, and green clothes with many patches, and brownish red hair. "Hey you can help me wheres Sage Malkor?" said Ray, "I dont know what your talking about." he grinned Ray tightend his fists and pick the small man up by his hat, he put up a good fight, by kicking in the air. "Tell me where Sage Malkor is!" he said "Ok, ok hes in the Forest Pub!", "Thank you" replied Ray, "Now put me down!" said the little man, "No I dont think I will" said Ray "well, what are ye going to do to me?" Before the little man could get out his last word Ray slung him towards a tree. "Thank you strange little man." said Ray
Act 11 Search and Rescue
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Post by Deleted on Nov 11, 2006 7:01:36 GMT -5
Does any1 wanna read it?
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Post by Deleted on Nov 11, 2006 8:25:52 GMT -5
i have it's gd. you can dobule post on here if it's your story
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Post by Deleted on Nov 13, 2006 18:44:07 GMT -5
that is an awesome story
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Post by Deleted on Nov 13, 2006 18:45:00 GMT -5
Thanks guys Im working on Act 2 of chapter2 right now
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Post by Deleted on Nov 13, 2006 19:52:12 GMT -5
Act ll Search and Rescue "Sage Malkor....Sage Malkor!" yelled Ray, "Please do not yellow strange tall man" said another little man, "Oh sorry sir um...Im looking for Sage Malkor about this tall large grey beard?" The little man looked at Ray for a few seconds and then said "Ah yes, he's over there in the corner." "Thanks" quickly replied Ray. Ray saw the old Sage sitting in a dim lit little corner, "Um, Sage Malkor is that you?", "Ah yes...Oh Ray hoho I didnt think you would be getting here that fast." replied the Sage, "You teleport me to who knows where and thats all you can say! I mean wheres Jake?!" "He's in the dark depths of the ocean right outside the Forest,I thought something went wrong with the teleportation spell." "You mean you sent him to the ocean." replied Ray, "Just a small mishap, and if you want to find a way to get him back I suggest you calm down." Ray sighed "Fine! Just tell me how I can get him back" well theres two ways growing gills with a potion that would take up to four days to make, or I give you this magic jewel the "Dragon Heart of Ocorion" it allows you to breath underwater while you wear it." Ray stood and pondered, he thought "That looks like the one the Swordsmaster gave me except blue right before he....", "Yes this is like the gem that the Swordsmaster gave you, actually one of many." "Thanks Sage Malkor!" He quickly grabbed the gem and took off. "I warn you young Ray there are.....in the water....!" Thats all Ray could here by the time he was out the door. "Ok lets see here this sign says I should go right to leave the Forest" it took Ray awhile but he finally got out of the forest. Suddenly Ray came to a large cliff over looking a large body of water. 'Gulp' Ray gasped at the sight of the water, "Well, here goes" Ray dove into the water not thinking of what lie beneath the water.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2006 7:16:18 GMT -5
kool, pleez continue!!!
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Post by Deleted on Nov 16, 2006 7:22:44 GMT -5
Act l l Search and Rescue Pt. 2
Once Ray hit the water it didnt feel cold nor warm, nor hot for some reason the water felt like a paradise. "I'd better go find Jake" thought Ray, so he swam towards a bright light in the distance. 'Swoosh' he heard something swim by him, "Must have been a fish" Ray figured. He then came to a large hill and swam over it to find the Water City, "Terrota", an amazing city built out of some sort of grey stone and seemed as if the coral and kelp were its trees. "Seems like a peaceful place" he thought, so he swam towards it to find Jake tied to a peace of coral with some kelp guarded by what looked to be Fish People. They were a solid light blue with spines running down their backs and fins, "Let him go!" he gargled, the fish people spotted Ray and lunged at him with coral blades. Ray had to think fast attack with his sword or, remember the lightning spell Sage Malkor taught him a long time ago. "Effenzor!" Ray remembered the spell and shot it a the water people. While the Fish people lie in shock Ray quickly swam towards Jake, pulled out the knife from his bag, slashed the kelp rope away, and swam towards the surface. Before he got to the surface a giant Water Serpent appeared out of nowhere, "Great another block in the road, Guardian Strife Blade!" Rays trusty blade shined forth into his hand, it was difficult to carry Jake on his back and his two handed blade in one hand he lunged forward and defeated the large Water Serpent. "Finally, the surface!" Ray gasped, almost exactly when Ray's hands touched the grass a Dark essence started pouring over the ground like a dark, and whispy fog.
Act lll The Dark Guest
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Post by Deleted on Nov 16, 2006 17:01:32 GMT -5
my only problem is that the battle is jsut eh lunged and it was over. it needs mroe detail
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Post by Deleted on Nov 19, 2006 7:44:16 GMT -5
Yea actually I thought the battle needed to be extended becuz it was to quick I'll try and write a little more detail.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 7, 2006 11:45:00 GMT -5
u have an amazing ability of storytelling.all of the acts are sooo awesome.pleez continue
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Post by Deleted on Dec 8, 2006 15:44:11 GMT -5
Im working on "A Dark Guest" right now its a pretty interesting act becuz this whole next Act is about the battle and something that happens to one of Ray's most prized possesions. But, I cant tell...
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Post by Deleted on Dec 8, 2006 20:09:47 GMT -5
Here it is Act 3 of Chapter 2 "The Dark Guest" ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Act lll The Dark Guest
The Dark Fog flowed over the ground like water on the beach. Suddenly, a tower of pure darkness started to rise out of the ground and a "Dark Figure" walked out of the darkness. "Who are you, and why are you here?!"said Ray, "I am here for you two, Chosen" replied the Dark Man. "Guardian Strife Blade!!" Ray's Blade appeared in his hands. "What do mean your after us, and what do you mean by Chosens?!","So, many questions...My, my so thats the Guardian Strife Blade I've heard so much about. Let's see how powerful you two are.." said the Dark Man, "Leave Jake out of this you freak!" replied Ray. "Hah Ha Ha, so stubborn" *Flash* A bright Red Flash shined in the Dark Stranger's hand and suddenly a Red Curved Blade was in his hand. 'I have to move Jake to safety it might take a lil power but, I have to move him' he thought, Ray lunged forward to Jake. The Dark Stranger stopped him, "The other Chosen stays where he is and we fight!", "Fine!" replied Ray. They flew towards eachother *Cling* *Slash* "You are good young Chosen..", "You havent seen anything yet!!" yelled Ray.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 8, 2006 23:48:19 GMT -5
awesome!!!!
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Post by Deleted on Dec 9, 2006 8:39:48 GMT -5
Now the Dark Guest Part 2. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Act 1V The Dark Guest Pt 2
*Shing* *Crash* "I wont let you take me or Jake! Ha!", Ray knocked the Stranger into a large tree trunk. "It seems I underestimated you, Ray..", said the Stranger. "How do you know my name?! If you know mine I should know yours so spill it!", "My name..my name is Xedris..I am a Dark Wizard sent to come and kidnap you both." said Xedris, "you..your a dark wizard?!" Ray remembered the stories of darkness that Sage Malkor told him about dark beings. "You freaks are the ones who destroyed my village so ruthlessly!!" yelled Ray "Oh, that was your village" Xedris said sarcastically. "Im going to make sure that you losers dont destroy or hurt anyone else!" said Ray *woosh* Ray slashed his blade at Xedris *Cling* he deflected his blow *Crash*, Ray's Blade broke in two. "My Blade!", "My Blade!" they both said. "This isnt over Ray, not by a long shot!" Xedris said while dissapearing in a cloud of dark smoke. "Wha...what..what happned Ray?" said Jake, "Dude...you missed.. an awsome..fight." replied Ray, "Hey, your blade its broken." "I know, maybe Sage Malkor will know how to fix it, we should go ask him." replied Ray then they entered the Kimato Forest.
Act V Journey to the Dwarf City
(After this Act its Chapter 3!)
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