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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 23, 2007 12:12:24 GMT -5
I'm not really good at fanfics, Mystico speaks english btw
It was quiet and warm. Mystico was sitting under a tree watching the silent battle unfold. He never really cared for battles, they were a real waste of his time, but he never backed down from a challenge. Mystico felt his cute chao eyes grow heavy "No, must...stay...awake" Mystico felt himself drift away from reality...and into his dreamless state.
--------------------------------(in Mystico's dream)
"Hey where am I" Mystico hated wondering,but it took up most of his time.
"I am your...." the voice had been cut off by Mystico's constant butting in
"Yeah Yeah, you're some evil creature here to haunt my dreams, don't think so somehow" Mystico stood up and walked towards the light
"No, I am here to help you" The voice replied softly
"Why I don't need your help!" Mystico shouted becoming very agigtated
"Please don't be mad, you will need my help!" the voice tried to explain but Mystico just wouldn't have it "You! I don't need you, like I don't need anyone I am here to find one thing!" Mystico stopped, he knew it would be dangerous to reveal his intentions of travelling. The light drifted away and Mystico found himself under the same tree as before.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 23, 2007 13:31:37 GMT -5
very good mystico. btw here yo uare allowed to double post
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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 23, 2007 13:47:57 GMT -5
Oh ok I just hate breaking rules as you know so double posting is good
k next post of story comin up!
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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 23, 2007 14:05:30 GMT -5
Mystico shook his head and his halo turned into a question mark.
"Weird, who was that?, what journey?" Mystico was asking all these questions in his mind "Well, better get moving" Mystico jumped up and walked along the dusty mud track, he hadn't seen a town or village for 5 days now. He was missing the urban life. "I miss being in the city" Mystico was talking to himself, he stopped and looked back, he couldn't turn back now, he just could'nt, that would be called quitting and Mystico was NOT A QUITTER. Mystico's eyes fired up, he smiled his infamous smile and dashed off leaving dust in his wake, he was travelling quite fast for a chao but he was no ordinary chao...no. Mystico skidded to a halt as he saw a highwayman, looking down at him, almost trying to intimidate him. "Hello young chao" he spoke in a merry voice "Are you lost?"
"Chao" Mystico pouted, the man raised an eyebrow "Shall I take you home?" he asked more politely
"No I can look after myself actually!" Mystico's eyes met with the man's, the man felt fear, angry even at the chao's attitude.
"Well unless you're a stray chao which I doubt, you'll have to come with me, these plains are dangerous even for the stubborn types" he leaned down and picked up Mystico who was struggling to get out of the highwayman's grasp "let go of me!" Mystico had been tired the day before so his strength wasn't at his maximum, he knew he had to resort to it, he hesitated then shouted "Crystal Infernus!" the ground started to shake and a crystal entity enveloped the the two, the man let go of Mystico and tried to run but was trapped, his horse grew frantic and bucked the man off. The man felt a crystal spike impale him right through the heart. The spike slipped away and the crystal entity faded and the rumbling off the ground died down. The man just laid there with Mystico on his dead body smiling with a maniacal smile. Mystico had killed him.
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Post by thouhair34 on Apr 23, 2007 14:46:14 GMT -5
i dno why i aint gd at english or art but myst is?
its rly annoying but rly proud makin.
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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 23, 2007 14:59:14 GMT -5
yep
I love fanfics I base my life around them
I go to fanfiction.net a lot
it gives you ideas on how to improve
I have currently 5 fanfics in my documents 1 completed
I am not doing anymore of Mystico's journey tonight wait till 3:30 or after for the next post
my school finishes at 3:15 takes about 15 mins to get home
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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 24, 2007 9:51:23 GMT -5
It started to pour down with warm rain. Mystico liked water so the it didn't irritate him. Mystico gave the corpse a monotonous stare before just walking off to the highlands, he had to cross the highlands, then the desert then he would then cross the ice plains, Mystico felt like this journey would never end, he would never find what he was looking for
The highlands were tall and almost mountainous, Mystico had always dreamed of hiking in mountains. He started along the grass covered mountains, he saw this place was abundant in chao, Mystico had been born here, old memories slowly drifted back from him learning to walk to turning into a hero, those memories would always stay in his mind. He was interupted by a fat ugly looking man with a moustache "ho ho ho" he laughed weirdly "chao, these chao would be excellent servants and this place would serve well for my base" It was Eggman, the same person who killed his mum and dad. "Hey you get away from here, these chao will have no home if you build anything here!" Mystico shouted at the man. "well a feisty one eh?" he was up to something Mystico knew it. Mystico felt rumbling as soon as Eggman snapped his fingers. A giant chao robot had emerges from the craggy undergrowth. "What is that!" Mystico queried, the robot made a swipe at him but missed pathetically, a battle started....
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Post by CS Revolked on Apr 24, 2007 14:06:23 GMT -5
Mystico ran towards the giant chao monster. He jumped up in the air but got thrown back by the giant hand. Mystico slid along the floor making dirt come up as he slid through the mud. Mystico opend one eye and winced in pain. "I not gonna give up so easy!" Mystico said to no-one in particular. He jumped up and used crystal lance towards the robot, it leaned to one side and forced a hand towards the shiny blue chao. Mystico jumped towards the chao and and used crystal velocity...
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Post by CS Revolked on May 7, 2007 4:39:18 GMT -5
Soz not much time to update well here it is ;D
Mystico's attack Crystal Velocity shot from his small purple hands and homed in on the creature, the giant chao was swaying from side-to-side, it was getting tired. The medium-sized ball of crystal made contact with the chao and knocked it backwards, it fell with a loud THUD and all it electrical circuits were now revealed, Mystico came back down to the ground from being in the air and just walked over and past the robot not even looking back, he didn't know what he was looking for, but he knew it would be of great importance to him in the future, he continued his journey across the mountainous highlands, he could feel the sun's heat warming up his back, he was getting dehydrated. The mountains went into a slope and at the bottom was a pool of water and a few chao had gathered there for a drink or something, Mystico took one step and tripped on a loose piece of rock he did a rolly-polly down the hill, almost like Sonic's infamous spindash, but not as perfect. He reached the pool and stopped rolling and uncurled himself then went to the edge and drank some of the fresh mineral water or spring, Mystico didn't know which one.
After a couple minutes of frolicing in the water Mystico jumped out and continued, a small baby chao crawled up to him, it was orange and had a sunhat on it's head, it took it's hat off and gave it to Mystico "For me?" Mystico questioned, the chao nodded his floating ball turning into a heart, a signal for happiness. Mystico thanked the chao and placed it firmly on his head, he dashed away at incredible speed (for a chao at least) and then stopped, he was at a peak, the highest peak of the whole region. He could see the whole of the desert and only a bit of the ice plains. Mystico smiled, expanding his wings to the side, he lifted himself a few inches off the ground and then proceded with flight, he was amongst the clouds, and down below he could see the craggy, muddy, mountain highlands turn into soft orange sand. He was now flying across the desert ruins of Dephirus, it was an abandoned city, that was alive 2 million years ago. Mystico descended a little to get a better look when another terror emerged from the clouds....a storm was brewing, a sandstorm.
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Post by Deleted on May 7, 2007 13:52:24 GMT -5
By the way if you want any chao character ideas for rthis hwo could join Mystico perhaps jsut aks and i'll make some up. Anyway it good so far
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Post by CS Revolked on May 7, 2007 14:55:18 GMT -5
I don't understand what you're sayin' Blaze
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Post by Deleted on May 7, 2007 15:01:26 GMT -5
if u need any help with chao characters i'm happy to help
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Post by CS Revolked on May 8, 2007 9:58:44 GMT -5
Oh thanks I might need help with 6 more
the names are
Zen
TrueBlue (?)
Mechanism(he's a robot chao)
Dread
Candy and
Jewel
what you think?
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Post by Deleted on May 8, 2007 10:27:33 GMT -5
Hmm i'll se what i can do. I'm thinknig one shoudl be chaos chao. Possibly Dread. He could be a chaos devil chao. Yeah dread the chaos devil chao. he should be a bad guy chao.
For the robochao go for something like omochao but better colours and with a better less annoying attitude.
Zen sort of sounds like a karate chao so i reckon hsi speed, stamina and power should be highest.. I think he shoudl be a hero chao as they get like robes.
Hmmmm trublue should be a sonic chao i think, but with higher flying so she can fly through the blue skies. Hse should also have high swimming. So She need high swimming, flying and speed. I think she should have a whale tail, dragon wings and a unicorn horn.
Candy should be a chaos hero chao with high flying, speed and stamina. She will be a sort of character that is attractive to other chao.
Jewel should be a chao who has won three of the jewel races and he shoudl be a shiny grey chao. The three races should be flying, running, and the luck inteelgence one. He should be a chao that others are jealous of.
Hope that helps
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Post by CS Revolked on May 8, 2007 10:31:53 GMT -5
thanks 4 advice
story good so far
I'd like more people to reply
What's good about it?
What should I improve?
plz comment
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